One-sentence summary : Mystic Therapy
If you think it’s hard to write a 100,000 word novel …
try condensing that to 600-800 words for a synopsis.
If you think it’s hard to write a synopsis …
try condensing that to 100-200 words for a query letter.
If you think it’s hard to write a query letter ….
try condensing that to 25 words for a logline or one sentence pitch.
91,000 words to 775 words to 215 words to this … and if this doesn’t sound interesting then none of the rest will either.
Fate brought Cupid’s Psychotherapist and the god of War together, but her disbelief of fairy tale love and his meddlesome kin could shelve their happily ever after.
Any thoughts? Like it? Don’t like it? 🙂
I saw your one-sentence pitch on Rachelle Gardner’s site. Anytime I see anything about the Greek gods I’m like, Who? Huh? Especially the God of War. Here’s my one-sentence pitch:
When Ares, God of War, regrets his life of senseless slaughter, he leaves Olympus to live as a single father in America.
You don’t by any chance have a partial/full out to Joanna Stampfel-Volpe? She was gonna request pages but said she had a few Greek god manuscripts on her desk. Bummer.
Hi Jamie! No, I don’t have anything into Joanna. 2010 is said to be “the year of the Gods” and I believe it. That just means that like vampire stories from 1-10 years ago there will be a boatload of them. 😉
So a single father huh? 🙂 Interesting. My next question would be … “so what’s the plot?” What’s the great conflict? Gotta add that in I think. 🙂
Good luck!
I know what you mean about “So what’s the plot?” I’ve written it both ways and I LIKE the simpler one better, the intimation of conflict but not the outright stating of it. (And I’ve been drawn to one-sentence pitches that are like that, too.) I think the God of War being a single father is surprising enough already. But that’s just where I am now, and could easily change it later.
My only suggestion for your one-sentence pitch would be… adding a name. The girl who is Cupid’s psychotherapist. Because I never attributed gender to “psychotherapist” and so it was confusing to read “her” afterward.
Fate brought Jane, Cupid’s Psychotherapist, and the god of War together, but her disbelief of fairy tale love and his (Cupid’s? Ares’s?) meddlesome kin could shelve their happily ever after.
Okay, so I guess I had two things… 😛
Thanks Jamie! I’ve heard mixed reviews on adding names! 🙂 It’s all crazy. 🙂
PS. I really like your logo. (I do design part time.)
Thanks! 🙂